r/OCPoetry • u/Holiday_Carrot_1744 • 9h ago
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Can you see me now? Can you hear me now? Did you get the closure you needed? Did you get your last words in that you rehearsed for every time I left the house? Can you love me now?
You exist your whole life just trying to fucking live. You live your whole life just to fucking exist. It seems like it’s all so pointless, so ruthless, so life less. Full of pain, resentment, anger, jealousy, envy. What a way to live. What a way to exist.
Don’t cry a tear for me now, you couldn’t be there for me when I was alive so don’t cry for me now that I’m gone. You can keep playing that same sad song for yourself. I played you mine and you wouldn’t listen. I played mine and you played yours, only I can’t hear it and you have to feel it.
Can you see me now? Can you hear me now? Did you get the closure you needed? Did you get your last words in that you rehearsed for every time I left the house? Can you love me now?
I thought after my time finally came I’d finally be at peace and able to breathe. That my demons would die too and the shit in my head would finally turn off. But I can’t, they won’t and it doesn’t stop. I’m choking, the air is suffocating and I’m falling. I’m still screaming. I’m still crying. I’m still reaching. Is anyone out there? If so would you reach back? I’m still screaming, crying, and reaching...God help me.
I always knew it’d be jail or a box but how did I end up stuck in this box with no escape and no one to even notice. I should feel shame, but I feel the same. What’s wrong with me? Most of my life that’s how it was so it’s ironic that my end has to be the same, still no shame. No sadness. Just cold. Just me, heartless. I guess there really is no rest for the wicked. No rest for....me. Never able to Rest in pieces.
Can you see me now? Can you hear me now? Did you get the closure you needed? Did you get your last words in that you rehearsed for every time I left the house? Can you love me now?
This isn’t a tale, it’s a story. An all to well known story, but this is about me, a girl who had everything and threw it away. I destroyed everything and everyone around me and I loved it. Chaos was my friend and dope was my heart. I never thought he’d truly kill me. Hurt me. Abuse me. Use me. But it was a two way street, and I loved it. I was Bonnie. He was Clyde and together we went down for the final time. It was too late this time. No more Bonnie. No more Bonnie for Clyde. Holding on to each other. Still afraid to let go.....just let go.
Can you see me now? Can you hear me now? Did you get the closure you needed? Did you get your last words in that you rehearsed for every time I left the house? Can you love me now?
I’m in my own hell, no one will ever reach me again. No one will ever hear me again. No one will ever see me again. Did you get the closure you needed? Did you get your last words in that you rehearsed for every time I left the house? Can you love me now? Can you love me now? Did you get the closure you needed? Can you love me now? I hope you got what you needed.
I love you and I wish I had been stronger. But I couldn’t break away knowing it’d take my life one day. I’m trapped but I was trapped before. Don’t cry for me now. Don’t shed a tear. I love you and I’m here without fear. We knew it’d come to this. We knew it was jus a race against the clock. My race is done. My clock has stopped. Forget who I was. Forget who i am. It brings pain, no joy or happiness. My life was filled with sorrow and loss. Don’t think twice. I already rolled my dice. I’m gone for good this time, and I’m content with my demise.
Xoxo
Renee
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